Engraved Spurs

What do you think about this poem?

i look in the mirror
i see my reflection
i see what i am
i gasp in realisation

Lips tainted with lies
hands grasping a grudge
a face contorted in jealousy
eyes quick to judge

this monster that looks back at me
is too much for me to bare,
i close my eyes,
but still, it lingers there

i scrub harder
try to clean myself
of this diseased mind,
try, but fail, to put it away on the shelf.

this brute everlasting
i must take to my grave,
will poison me forever
turning me into a knave.

a liar, a cheat,
unable to see "good"
only capable of the bad,
it's been engraved in wood

i must be this way always,
this beast that i am,
the spur of change,
has been buried as a sham.
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please tell me if you hate it, like it, what's good, what's bad, what i could improve etc.

please express your opinions on my poem freely, i don't mind criticism as long as it's constructive.

thanks.

Honestly? It's pretty much like every other poem. When I say "every other," I mean those written by people who don't put much thought into their work.
Poetry is best when it makes strong use of symbolism, metaphors, similes, etc. You could add a hint of surprise. Something to draw the reader in. Describe the "monster" aspect first then reveal the "mirror." Create a false sense of security then reveal the flaws.
You're cycling the same idea without bringing anything new into the picture.
You also misused the word "knave." And the wood and shelf references seem out of place and, quite frankly, gratuitous.

It's a quick read but it wont really stand out. Of course, if you're doing this for fun then you could just ignore all of that. Heh...

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